Undertale rp

  • Undertale rp

  • Dream sans

    Member
    December 12, 2018 at 7:30 am

    (Just imagine ink in a green dress)

    ~woah what is he doing~

    Today was way different when ink came to save an AU. Today he went to (insert AU!) but he was wearing a green dress and was grumbling to himself saying stuff like.

    “Why? Error you made me do this, all because i lost last time?”

    all Error could do was laugh but Dream drops in

    “Ink keep positive please dont let the dress get to you.. plus you look fine!”

    dream swung his staff making it a bow, blue dropped in and whined as Ink raised his paintbrush.

    “Now since the other star sanses are here….. ATTACK!! And dont let him win!”

    after a long fight ink was kneeling with cross holding his knife to Inks head. Nightmare was holding dream back. Fell had blue, the magnificent blueberry, on the ground crying.

  • Apple Marigold [Vox#DominoBug]

    Organizer
    December 12, 2018 at 10:39 am

    //Hi Dream, thanks for posting! I’m gonna go all grade school teacher on this if you don’t mind ^^;
    Please be aware that I’m trying to keep criticism constructive so that you can more easily roleplay here with others. I might be a wee bit harsh but I’m not trying to insult you or anything, okie?

    First thing’s first, you have characters with common nouns for names. While this is perfectly acceptable (my name’s Apple after all), please capitalise them consistently to avoid confusion. When you said to imagine ink in a green dress, my first thought was a green dress with loads of ink stains on the inside ^^”

    Next, I understand you can’t upload pictures of your character in forums. I still think we ought to know what they look like so I have 2 suggestions. Either you can upload them to a place like DeviantArt and create an image link with the IMG button, or you can write a little description yourself. It doesn’t have to be too detailed but it’s useful to at least know the species, gender and age that the characters appear to be.

    Lastly, what is AU? It might be a term you’re familiar with but I honestly haven’t a clue! I would try to avoid acronyms wherever possible. When roleplaying with others, clarity is super important.

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