Help please
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Help please
So I wrote this poem for a contest, could you tell me if anything doesn’t flow right or how I could improve it before sending it in?
The night sky, we all know
Is filled with shining stars
But they’re actually quite rare
And very far apartThere’s a vast empty space
Round those meteoroids
A thing we rarely mention
And I call it the voidAll the dark, unchanging space
Around the small pinpricks of light
Often goes unnoticed
When we stare up at the nightImagine earth without the stars
Think of the thick, unyielding black
We’d stumble from our homes, all blind
With no light to guide us backBut imagine earth without the void
Think of the constant, solid light
We’d be set ablaze and whither
Without the calmness of the nightThe void, the black, is precious
Far more than it knows
It’s the constant, silent backdrop
To all those stars’ bright glowsAnd here on earth, under the sky
Among our seas, and trees, and sand
Some of us are voids as well
And we all understandWe sit back and applaud
As our companions reach their height
They’re glorified, and we’re ignored
But we know that’s alrightWe know our worth is made
Not by our silence, or our dark
But by how faithfully we cradle
Our friends, the glowing sparks
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